My favorite edit passage of the day.
The luminous
landscape of the pangerra flowers filled her vision. Before, she had been able
to see the flowers as they glowed, blinking slightly. But now, she could follow
the beginning of the glow from deep inside the plant and watch as it spread
through the flower, a flame igniting. She found herself staring at the flowers
with her mouth agape, like some bug mystified by the beauty of their radiance. One
of the brothers stepped too close to a blossom, and it ejected pollen into the
air like fireworks, a flash of brilliance in the night sky.
Chapter 10: Night Run
So do you plan to also have it professionally edited?
ReplyDeleteGosh sorry it took so long to reply to this, it got lost in all the blog hop comments!:) Although I do not plan to send it to a professional, it has been through many rounds of editing, as well has gone to some pretty awesome beta readers.
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